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ptahrrific) wrote2012-05-29 07:07 pm
ptahrrific) wrote2012-05-29 07:07 pm
Madoka Magica | MadoHomu, MadoSaya, others | R | Persephone's Waltz (Table of Contents)
Title: Persephone's Waltz
Series: Puella Magi Madoka Magica
Characters/Pairings: MadoHomu, MadoSaya; Madoka, Homura, Sayaka, Hitomi, Kyuubei, Walpurgisnacht, (skip) Tomohisa, Junko, Kyousuke, Kyoko, Kriemhild Gretchen, Homulilly, Oktavia von Seckendorff, Albertine
Rating: Through R
Warnings: Kidnapping, Stockholm syndrome, graphic depictions of violence, language, self-harm/suicide references, teenage sexuality, mortal peril, character death. Spoilers for the whole series.
Beta:politicette
Disclaimer: MadoMagi isn't mine. Sad but true.
The more times she fails to save Madoka, the more desperate Homura gets...until kidnapping her and locking her in a basement until Walpurgisnacht is over stops sounding like such a crazy idea.
Parts of this fill my![[community profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/community.png)
hc_bingo round 3 card, prompt "sacrifice," and my longfic_bingo card, prompt "grief." Has a mirror on the AO3.
Volume I
1) This is a joke, right?
2) I'm not taking anything from her.
3) If I write Mama a letter....
4) She's a puella magi, just as I am.
5) Can't you just tell me?
6) You said you'd be here. You promised!
7) You can't forget that that's wrong!
8) Kyuubei says she's 'anomalous'...whatever that means.
9) All that matters is to keep moving.
10) Akemi's weak point is you.
11) I bet you think that's really wonderful!
12) I think I met one in a dream, or something.
Volume II
13) Can you make it?
14) You must be new at this.
15) Don't you go worrying about storms!
16) I believe it's the right thing to do.
17) There's nobody else.
18) The time I try to keep her closest...
19) Just another form of insanity
20) I'm right here. [thetiro finale]
Commentary & Deleted Scenes
Series: Puella Magi Madoka Magica
Characters/Pairings: MadoHomu, MadoSaya; Madoka, Homura, Sayaka, Hitomi, Kyuubei, Walpurgisnacht, (skip) Tomohisa, Junko, Kyousuke, Kyoko, Kriemhild Gretchen, Homulilly, Oktavia von Seckendorff, Albertine
Rating: Through R
Warnings: Kidnapping, Stockholm syndrome, graphic depictions of violence, language, self-harm/suicide references, teenage sexuality, mortal peril, character death. Spoilers for the whole series.
Beta:
politicetteDisclaimer: MadoMagi isn't mine. Sad but true.
The more times she fails to save Madoka, the more desperate Homura gets...until kidnapping her and locking her in a basement until Walpurgisnacht is over stops sounding like such a crazy idea.
Parts of this fill my
hc_bingo round 3 card, prompt "sacrifice," and my longfic_bingo card, prompt "grief." Has a mirror on the AO3.Volume I
1) This is a joke, right?
2) I'm not taking anything from her.
3) If I write Mama a letter....
4) She's a puella magi, just as I am.
5) Can't you just tell me?
6) You said you'd be here. You promised!
7) You can't forget that that's wrong!
8) Kyuubei says she's 'anomalous'...whatever that means.
9) All that matters is to keep moving.
10) Akemi's weak point is you.
11) I bet you think that's really wonderful!
12) I think I met one in a dream, or something.
Volume II
13) Can you make it?
14) You must be new at this.
15) Don't you go worrying about storms!
16) I believe it's the right thing to do.
17) There's nobody else.
18) The time I try to keep her closest...
19) Just another form of insanity
20) I'm right here. [the
Commentary & Deleted Scenes
Re: The ending and the middle
The second-to-last chapter is the second longest as-is (with the last chapter being the longest). And again, the whole point of the epic final battle is to be chaotic and rapid-fire and fast-paced, and well past the time of exposition. No matter what kind of attention you wanted the characters to get at this point, I can't imagine where the narrative would have stopped to shoehorn it in.
Of course Madoka is affected by Sayaka's death. She's also in shock, doesn't get any time to let the reality of it sink in, and has had her emotional presentation in general messed up by the captivity. I think the reaction you're expecting is the one that would have hit her not long afterward -- except, of course, that she didn't last long enough to get an "afterward."
I'm glad you liked...well, mostly just the first five chapters, I guess. Sorry you didn't care for any of the rest of the plot.