i read this a while ago, but now that i see it reposted i really want to read it again. (darn you! i have work to do. which is, of course, nowhere near as interesting as you story.)

one thing, though:
chapter seven should be ..... et Amici Iudaici

it has to end in "i" so it's the same casus, genitivus, as "patris" and "filii". also, i've never heard the word habraeus before, it might mean jewish, but "Iudaicus" is certainly the more common word for it.

(yay, i never thought taking latin would ever come in handy!)