This version of Stephen is, depending on which way you look at it, both much more self-assured and much more of a complete mess. I can see that utterly and completely. ♥ Jon :)
Huh, that's an interesting distinction between dick and cock, but yeah, I see that too. Not sure how to soften that (lol) in the text... :D no worries, it's not the kind of thing that's supposed to go smoothly or without confusion anyway.
Oh sorry, the "it" I meant was in "Fine," panted Stephen. "It's just — it got twisted, it pinches, it — Jon?" Especially the repitition of "it" three times, made me think "why is he referring to part of himself as 'it'?" Maybe Stephen would get hung up on thinking of that part of himself as 'not real' and 'not good enough', but I think his character is more likely to go into pride overdrive and refer to that part of himself (detachable or not) in a more personal matter.
LoL sorry, that just reminded me... Ah, as for how guys refer to their penises... either "I" as if they were referring to their entire being, or "he" - which reminded me of seeing Rory Albanese do standup and joke about the really confident guys being the ones who give their dicks girl's names - "Me and Gretchen here would like to show you a good time"
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Huh, that's an interesting distinction between dick and cock, but yeah, I see that too. Not sure how to soften that (lol) in the text... :D no worries, it's not the kind of thing that's supposed to go smoothly or without confusion anyway.
Oh sorry, the "it" I meant was in "Fine," panted Stephen. "It's just — it got twisted, it pinches, it — Jon?" Especially the repitition of "it" three times, made me think "why is he referring to part of himself as 'it'?" Maybe Stephen would get hung up on thinking of that part of himself as 'not real' and 'not good enough', but I think his character is more likely to go into pride overdrive and refer to that part of himself (detachable or not) in a more personal matter.
LoL sorry, that just reminded me... Ah, as for how guys refer to their penises... either "I" as if they were referring to their entire being, or "he" - which reminded me of seeing Rory Albanese do standup and joke about the really confident guys being the ones who give their dicks girl's names - "Me and Gretchen here would like to show you a good time"
Eep :(
:D
*hugs*