aybara_max: (Geek (rachel))
Lon Chaney's kid brother ([personal profile] aybara_max) wrote in [personal profile] ptahrrific 2010-02-10 12:52 pm (UTC)

Have to admit, at first I found the abrupt shift between present & past confusing (mostly for someone who hasn't actually read "I'll Be That Girl" first), but I swiftly forgot that as Charlene took the upper hand in the newly imagine confrontation with "Stephen".

Switching back... I love the detail of Stephen taking pleasure in Jon's hand protectively at the small of his back, even while it raises alarm bells. D: Poor Jon, worrying about drunk Stephen after he mentions "Sweetness"!

The whole scene with Stephen and Charlene sitting on opposite sides of the tree is beautiful (heart-wrenching too).

Aaaaaand speaking of beautiful and heartwrenching <3 ;__; (did you post this bit as a teaser earlier? I seem to remember the bit about Charlene practicing his swagger)

I think it goes without saying that this whole passage, starting with They drive for a good hour and a half under the overbright full moon before pulling over onto a narrow strip of grass and clambering out of the pickup. is my absolute favorite, especially "It's my job to protect you now," adds Charlene gruffly ::chokes up a bit::





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